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Infirnex
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PostSubject: Nightmare   Nightmare I_icon_minitimeWed Jun 01, 2011 5:25 am

Nightmare

In one corner a blaze consumes my life,
And it penetrates my heart with a knife
In the next corner I see a person that dies,
And later I am told all these lies.
In the other corner I see evictions,
And we had to forget our sacred traditions.
In the final corner I see you with him,
And all of a sudden the lights go dim.
After a scream I enter a blank stare.
And I realize it was all a nightmare.
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PostSubject: Re: Nightmare   Nightmare I_icon_minitimeWed Jun 01, 2011 10:07 am

Wow... rock on
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PostSubject: Re: Nightmare   Nightmare I_icon_minitimeWed Jun 01, 2011 4:39 pm

Like i said before, i like the poem but makes me think stuff >.<
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PostSubject: Re: Nightmare   Nightmare I_icon_minitimeWed Jun 01, 2011 11:12 pm

I like it..
But,
It's almost too rhymie.
It doesnt feel like it has feeling..
It's just like..
"I want this to rhyme and I want views."
So yeah.
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PostSubject: Re: Nightmare   Nightmare I_icon_minitimeThu Jun 02, 2011 3:30 am

Well I was forced to write this one as well -.-
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